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What’s worse, being dead or dying?

By Mark Prisco, Apr 27, 2017.

More work by Mark Prisco
  1. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    Pine cone;
    you;
    red shoes,
    grass/New
    moon/pale

    sky, so
    cool  -
    evening. Think:

    if you
    go does Day/
    Night also?
    disappear

    as if
    it
    never was
    even
    here.

    Hold on,
     
  2. Anna Ruiz

    Anna Ruiz I have the same religion as that tree over there. Supporter

    Good question, I'm solipsistic though.

    I like the form/at but who/knows to hold
    on?  Off?
     
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  3. Tim J Brennan

    Tim J Brennan Well-Known Member

    Well, at least you answer the question.  Sort of  ;)   What a great line...still thinking about the comma.
     
  4. Anna Ruiz

    Anna Ruiz I have the same religion as that tree over there. Supporter

    Actually, it's the thought, I think.  Until it's faced.
     
  5. Eliot Jacobson

    Eliot Jacobson Not as new to this planet as once I was Supporter Editor

    Okay, can't resist -

    To die- to sleep.
    To sleep- perchance to dream: ay, there's the rub!
    For in that sleep of death what dreams may come
    When we have shuffled off this mortal coil,
    Must give us pause.
     
  6. Anna Ruiz

    Anna Ruiz I have the same religion as that tree over there. Supporter

    Do not go gentle into that good night
     
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  7. Ton Romus

    Ton Romus Well-Known Member Supporter

    Really like this (a lot) and dig on the pineal gland reference right out of the
    pine cone box I'm like crossing over in stages testing the premise of trans
    ference et cetera and the answer is very simple provided one has
    asked the correct question!

    Well done Mark!
     
  8. TrishSaunders

    TrishSaunders Member Supporter Editor

    I really like the inconsistent & daring use of punctuation here .... which usually doesn't zing me ... and the unanswered (and unasked) questions in this. Really great work, Mark.
     
  9. TrishSaunders

    TrishSaunders Member Supporter Editor

    And as for that headline .... no body alive could resist it.
     
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  10. don chance

    don chance "~Happy Buddha~"

    Hey Anna,
    Happy Buddha asks, "In whose mind do I exist, mine or yours?"
     
  11. Anthony Hughes

    Anthony Hughes Well-Known Member

    the last line kills.
     
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  12. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    thanks Anna. Why do you say: I'm solipsistic though?
     
  13. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    Great poem, Eliot. Reminds me of... Hamlet?
     
  14. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    great reply, Ton. and i'm pleased you like it a lot
     
  15. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    thank you, Trish
     
  16. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    Thanks Anthony
     
  17. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    ok. thanks Dylan
     
  18. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    who do i thank for the feature?
     
  19. I'm sorry to say the poem doesn't make sense to me.

    But, imo, dying is worse than death.

    I think Heaven is the most beautiful day, more than is possible for the human mind to imagine.
     
  20. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    Thanks Cheryl
     
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  21. Jenn Zed

    Jenn Zed Solid State Gynoid Supporter Editor

    I don't know, Marc .. any answers to the questions you raise .. but, I do like your poem :)
    Stirs muddy waters,

    I like.
     
  22. Anna Ruiz

    Anna Ruiz I have the same religion as that tree over there. Supporter

    All questions and answers lurk in my head.  Sometimes they come out to play.  :)
     
  23. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    Thank you Tim. Glad i got you thinking about a comma
     
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  24. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    creepy :)
     
  25. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    Thank you Jenn :)
    almost didn't post it
     
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  26. David Belcher

    David Belcher Don't forget to be Awesome Supporter

    Interesting Mark, the first part especially made me pause and think. I like that. What you say here isn't original but you say it in such a minimal, brutally minimal way that it feels different.
     
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  27. Mark Prisco

    Mark Prisco Well-Known Member

    Thank you kindly, David.
     
  28. Jay Dougherty

    Jay Dougherty Well Worn Supporter Editor

    Reminds me of Larry Eigner's work--minus the all-over-the-page formatting (which I think adds to his work/might add to this).

    (Like that avatar.)
     
  29. TrishSaunders

    TrishSaunders Member Supporter Editor

    If somebody asks directly, I'll answer, though usually try to be anonymous. Feature twas me. But no thanks necessary. That's my (cough) job....
     
  30. H Rollins

    H Rollins New Member

    I like the sense of fragmentation -- always something I liked in poetry, which is why I'm getting an e. e. cummings vibe from this.
     
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