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Fragments of Jean

By Tim J Brennan, Oct 6, 2017.

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  1. Tim J Brennan

    Tim J Brennan Well-Known Member

    There are twelve years in a primary school, thirteen hearts
    in a deck of cards. I played

    with both. I never saw my father pray, only saw him cry
    once at his sister’s funeral.

    Jean went in her garage, shut all the doors, started the car.
    I often wonder if she prayed

    before the gas ran out: give me back my childhood,
    take my hand, squeeze it hard

    Father watched me climb stairs, learn
    an eclipse is the moon

    crossing in front of the sun. He once told me
    there would be times

    no church bells would ring, no boy would swing.
    I was thirteen and I still wonder

    what happened. Did she have some sort of opening,
    a breach of sorts? There were hearts

    her hands couldn’t reach, times that went beyond
    her own.
     
  2. Daniel J. Flore III

    Daniel J. Flore III Well-Known Member

    Enjoyed many of the details. Places I would revise-
     
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  3. Tim J Brennan

    Tim J Brennan Well-Known Member

    Thanks for enjoying many of the details, Daniel J. Flore III.  I edited a bit.
     
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  4. Daniel J. Flore III

    Daniel J. Flore III Well-Known Member

    It's excellent now.
     
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  5. Tim J Brennan

    Tim J Brennan Well-Known Member

    Thanks for the push.
     
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  6. Jay Dougherty

    Jay Dougherty Well Worn

    Love this. Starts out strong and stays that way.
     
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  7. Tim J Brennan

    Tim J Brennan Well-Known Member

    Thank you, Jay.  Appreciate your words.
     
  8. Tim J Brennan

    Tim J Brennan Well-Known Member

    Thanks, Sonja.
     
  9. Tim J Brennan

    Tim J Brennan Well-Known Member

    Thanks for Like, Trish.
     
  10. WestWaterhouse

    WestWaterhouse West Waterhouse

    I like this very much. Some brilliant lines here. This is worth showing off.
     
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  11. Lisa Frank

    Lisa Frank New Member

    6:00 am here. Now it feels like 25 o'clock. Penetrating, beautiful, Tim. Thank you for posting
     
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  12. Tim J Brennan

    Tim J Brennan Well-Known Member

    I'm sorry, West, I did not see this until now.  Thank you for your comments.
     
  13. Tim J Brennan

    Tim J Brennan Well-Known Member

    Thank you muchly, Lisa Frank. I apologize for not acknowledging this until now.