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A Cold House

By TrishSaunders, May 16, 2017.

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  1. TrishSaunders

    TrishSaunders Member Supporter Editor

    We won’t enter each other's houses again.
    You won’t walk the sidewalk like a prisoner
    going to his execution

    When you lift the bird-shaped knocker,
    it will not be me who greets you

    My arms won’t open as if to say,
    shed your coat, it’s warm in here

    It won’t be these black shadows turning
    their heads to hear bells pealing
    in the inner rooms

    One bell pull for each disappointment,
    each fisted grudge

    We’ll forget if we got lost coming here
    the first time; if we had to consult maps
    or ask if anyone had lived on that
    dreary street before.
     
  2. Lavonne Westbrooks

    Lavonne Westbrooks Save the Liver! Supporter Editor

    Another wonderful poem.
     
  3. TrishSaunders

    TrishSaunders Member Supporter Editor

    lavonne, thanks! I struggled a lot with the ending; i hope it doesn't show.
     
  4. Maria Mazzenga

    Maria Mazzenga Well-Known Member Supporter Editor

    Poignant.  Can to apply to both an emptied house and to a visitation to a life once lived.  Lovely.
     
  5. Tom Riordan

    Tom Riordan member Supporter

    Eloquent, sad.
    Enjoyed this, Trish.
    Tom
     
  6. TrishSaunders

    TrishSaunders Member Supporter Editor

    Thanks, Maria, I had only vague thought about a previous life lived; what a great read by you. I appreciate that.
     
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  7. TrishSaunders

    TrishSaunders Member Supporter Editor

    Thanks, Tom, can always count on you for read and ideas. Much appreciated!
     
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  8. Lavonne Westbrooks

    Lavonne Westbrooks Save the Liver! Supporter Editor

    This poem is one that the reader can embrace - become a part of. It could be about a broken relationship, an actual home, or about someone's past, or any number of other interpretations.
     
  9. Jordan Trethewey

    Jordan Trethewey Fly on the wall

    Fully-realized longing and regret, Trish. Well done.
     
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  10. TrishSaunders

    TrishSaunders Member Supporter Editor

    Thanks, Jordan, I'm glad it struck something within ... hopefully, it didn't pound.
     
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  11. Peter Le Baige

    Peter Le Baige New Member

    Much enjoyed, Trish, especially the 'bells' as in:

    It won’t be our shadows turning
    to hear bells pealing
    in the inner rooms

    One bell pull for each disappointment,
    each ancient hurt

    Nice to find a bell sound at the heart of a poem!
     
  12. TrishSaunders

    TrishSaunders Member Supporter Editor

    Hi, Peter, appreciate your read.
     
  13. Cameron McClure

    Cameron McClure Half man, half banana Supporter

    Don't know how I missed this Trish and why it hasn't had more comments. Like others of your recent poems this reaches out a fist, grabs the reader's insides and twists. The metaphor of the bell is strong - the soul that rings when struck by love, the celebratory peal of a ceremony (that didn't happen?), the bell that tolls for the departed. Very good. C
     
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  14. TrishSaunders

    TrishSaunders Member Supporter Editor

    HI Cameron, thank you for the read....the idea of bell ringing or not is not wholly new, but I'm glad you found something newish in it, anyway. T.
     
  15. Deeply resonant. Very good reading.

    T
     

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