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  The road to Damascus
« on: May 22, 2006, 05:36:56 PM » by milner place

All along Jensen Avenue poverty had spilled
out of the houses, even the dogs and cats
had caught it and a harsh and sulfurous light
had faded the T-shirts of the jobless welders
and the blouses of their pubescent daughters.

The newsagents on the north-west corner
didn’t sell wallets, and the glass case
full of pens and watches was sealed
with a patina of dead dust. That’s not
to say that dignity had been abolished,

nor that the music that inhabits aspirations
was silenced nor the drums of passion dismantled.
Children blew about the street like crisp packets,
doorways were carpeted with condoms, laughter
fell about, half an hour after the bars opened.

It was while he was stealing a girl’s bicycle
from the alley by the chapel that Amos Dupre
caught sight of a fluorescent angel lurking
behind the tombstone of Andrea Bellini, mother
of Patsy Fate and a seven piece rock band.

And it told him to get his thieving hands
off the bike and pointed out to him
that in Draper’s Close a fish-merchant
had just parked a Ford Capri and neglected
to remove the keys from the ignition.

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'Caminante, no hay camino,
se hace camino al andar'
- Antonio Machado

Latest book 'naked invitation' $15 or £10, p&p inc milnerplace@msn.com

  Re: THE ROAD TO DAMASCUS
« Reply #1 on: May 22, 2006, 05:52:35 PM » by Jay Dougherty
Milner, this is fascinating work. Please do explain the genesis of it. Is this part of a series? From the outset your voice is engaging and the rhythm of the piece moves the reader along nicely. Do post more.

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I do not like to write. I like to have written. --Gloria Steinam

  Re: THE ROAD TO DAMASCUS
« Reply #2 on: May 22, 2006, 07:09:11 PM » by Desiree Wright
Welcome Milner. I am honored that you have endulged us with your talent. Fine work, as always.

Let me know if there is anything about the site that is unclear to you.

D

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  Re: THE ROAD TO DAMASCUS
« Reply #3 on: May 22, 2006, 07:35:47 PM » by milner place
Thanks, Jay. And thanks to Desiree to steering me this way.
Don't know the genesis of this, other than the people who live here in Huddersfield, UK, and their humour. It's not part of a series but bears some things in common with other poems. But I jump from mood to mood, style to style, in a most undignified and disorganised fashion.
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'Caminante, no hay camino,
se hace camino al andar'
- Antonio Machado

Latest book 'naked invitation' $15 or £10, p&p inc milnerplace@msn.com

  Re: THE ROAD TO DAMASCUS
« Reply #4 on: May 22, 2006, 07:37:32 PM » by larry jordan
Nice work. Very rich tone and fresh imagery. The use of fixed/named references provides an element that keeps the images associated. The association yields its own tone, sound and idea. Yet a narrative thread keeps the reader from puzzling outside the impact of the language; we are still engaged in listening. The disjunction of the destination in the title seems a little too hip, a little off-handed and not reflective of the tight work within the poem. Just a thought. Welcome indeed.

larry
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  Re: THE ROAD TO DAMASCUS
« Reply #5 on: May 23, 2006, 12:19:33 PM » by maggie flanagan-wilkie
I enjoyed this immensely. It's imagery and wonderful voice brought me right into the piece.

Maggie
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  Re: THE ROAD TO DAMASCUS
« Reply #6 on: May 24, 2006, 10:51:46 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks
It was so delightful and made me smile to myself.
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  Re: THE ROAD TO DAMASCUS
« Reply #7 on: May 25, 2006, 07:44:45 PM » by alexXxander
i reallyed enjoyed the diction.
keep it up.
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  Re: The road to Damascus
« Reply #8 on: January 16, 2012, 09:38:53 AM » by silent lotus
dear Milner


a fluorescent angel lurking
behind the tombstone


enlightening to find this in the archives of your inkwell

finely penned !

silent lotus

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  Re: The road to Damascus
« Reply #9 on: January 16, 2012, 10:43:28 AM » by milner place
There's a lot of lurking round these parts, SL. Thanks for pulling this one back- kind of like it myself.

milner
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'Caminante, no hay camino,
se hace camino al andar'
- Antonio Machado

Latest book 'naked invitation' $15 or £10, p&p inc milnerplace@msn.com

  Re: The road to Damascus
« Reply #10 on: January 16, 2012, 11:07:01 AM » by Sue Lozynskyj
made me smile.
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