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« on: September 21, 2008, 02:58:03 PM » by Rick Stansberger

Cornfields made him think of sex.
Clouds made him think of sex.

Anything that came out
of the glowing car radio at night
went right into his brain.

The mothers stopped liking him
so he got along with the daughters.

Menace? What menace?
He liked driving fast through cornfields
on cloudy nights
with the radio loud.

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« Reply #1 on: September 21, 2008, 03:26:25 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks

That would be - because he was thinking of sex. Right?

Loved it.

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« Reply #2 on: September 21, 2008, 03:35:43 PM » by milner place

Love how you've turned an old jest into something magical and loud.

milner

PS. Will be a pick, anon.

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« Reply #3 on: September 21, 2008, 04:37:05 PM » by Jonathan Bracker

Very refreshing. I like the "logic" of what you report in stanza 3 and I like the emphasis given the last word. It reminds me of a joke I heard about a man at a therapy session, answering his therapist's question about why the dropping of a handkerchief reminded him of sex, "Everything reminds me of sex."

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« Reply #4 on: September 21, 2008, 07:18:27 PM » by brian_edwards

Excellent Rick. I'm smiling and nodding, people are staring, but I don't care. This is poetry.
Thank you.

B.

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« Reply #5 on: September 21, 2008, 07:30:35 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks

They are staring because you are thinking about sex. :)

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« Reply #6 on: September 21, 2008, 07:34:27 PM » by brian_edwards

Maybe they're staring at me and thinking about sex ;)

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« Reply #7 on: September 21, 2008, 07:44:06 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks

Well duh! :D

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« Reply #8 on: September 21, 2008, 09:15:59 PM » by MichelleBethCronk

LOL

oh, and nice poem bear....xo Cronk

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« Reply #9 on: September 21, 2008, 09:22:30 PM » by larry jordan

What a bunch of dreamers. Great poem.

larry

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« Reply #10 on: September 21, 2008, 09:24:38 PM » by EB

I love driving through the cornfields at night with the music loud.

Excellent.

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« Reply #11 on: September 21, 2008, 11:12:25 PM » by Rick Stansberger

Quote from: EB on September 21, 2008, 09:24:38 PM

I love driving through the cornfields at night with the music loud.

Excellent.

But are you thinking of sex?

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« Reply #12 on: October 02, 2008, 12:50:11 PM » by Rick Stansberger

Thanks, John! I appreciate the pick!

Rick

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« Reply #13 on: October 02, 2008, 06:03:26 PM » by Jess Miltner

oh, no need to bold loud, rick it speaks volumes. liked this poem.

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it's an anywhere road for anybody anyhow

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« Reply #14 on: October 02, 2008, 06:10:24 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks

It is one of your best Rick. Glad to see it up front.

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