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Holding The Letter
« on: April 26, 2008, 11:44:40 PM » by richardsmith

Holding the letter
My heart beats faster
I push the window open
To let the full moon
Replace my heart

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #1 on: April 27, 2008, 04:01:12 PM » by milner place

This has quite startling strength and beauty with those last two lines. A simple image but huge.

milner

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #2 on: April 27, 2008, 04:07:20 PM » by MichelleBethCronk

I agree Milner.....I like this one by Richard very much. xo M

the verb "push" has a particular impact to me in this one - very nice

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #3 on: April 27, 2008, 04:15:00 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks

Five lines as full as that moon. Very nice.

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #4 on: April 27, 2008, 05:40:23 PM » by Lynn Doiron

Ditto to praise already given.

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #5 on: April 27, 2008, 10:56:16 PM » by richardsmith

Thanks very much to you all, for so nice comments. I hope you will be more strict with me in correcting my poems. I am ready to learn. Best regards. Richard Smith

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #6 on: April 28, 2008, 09:41:42 AM » by MichelleBethCronk

Don't worry Richard.....when needed, we will help --

but this poem is lovely just as it is and very nicely done...

xo Michelle

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #7 on: April 28, 2008, 04:45:47 PM » by Oleksa

Wow, this was surprising. Agree with Milner et al on the last two lines, very nicely done!

Take care,

-O

P.S. Welcome (or maybe not, I haven't been here in weeks)!

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #8 on: May 13, 2008, 02:11:17 PM » by Rick Stansberger

This does exactly what a short poem does best! Very Zen.

Rick

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #9 on: May 13, 2008, 05:34:25 PM » by larry jordan

I missed this, and agree with the praise. Sharp and lucid. Perfect.

larry

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #10 on: May 29, 2008, 05:21:41 PM » by Jay Dougherty

Well, I agree: this was a surprise, and a pleasant one. Since it's my pick this week, I'll send it up.

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #11 on: May 29, 2008, 05:37:37 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks

Super choice. Congrats richardsmith!

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #12 on: May 29, 2008, 06:57:24 PM » by Lynn Doiron

Great pick for front page! Bravo!

lynn

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #13 on: May 29, 2008, 07:20:20 PM » by Brian Edwards

Congratulations richard - well deserved.

B.

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Re: Holding The Letter
« Reply #14 on: May 29, 2008, 09:45:48 PM » by Sherry Thrasher

Must have been some letter. I appreciate the brevity of your poem. Well done.

Sherry

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