e
                             ev
                           r eve
                         er even
                       ver even k
                     ever even kn
                   never even kno 
                d never even know
               ld never even know i
             uld never even know if
           ould never even know if I
        would never even know if I d
     u would never even know if I di
   ou would never even know if I die
 you would never even know if I died

I like it.
It looks like a picture of life. It kinda builds up a bit, takes a little longer; then it plumets down steeply.
It's a good'un.

bullshit!

mike

Hm.

Can I steal this and claim it as my own as I ride the wave of internet fame?

lol....


no.

Too late, already submitted this to The Journal of Angst-ridden Poetry for the Chronically Depressed.

LOLOLOLOLOL

I don't think this is done. It should continue down into a second triangular point that erases back towards the beginning. A giant diamond shape? Yes!

I disagree leo!

It ends at the horizon. Its shape rises up from the horizon like a pyramid. For me the writer is questioning her importance in this life. Here and now.

shut up!

I had the same thought on the way to work, but I always over do everything, but you think it would work?

I agree with Leo. The mirroring of fleeting thoughts is better portrayed.

I like it the way it is, adding more lines would be superfluous. Why add something nobody will read?

o m y

This is such a reasonable and rationale question it sickens me. Thanks for the upset stomach.

bull shit because if you died we would know!!!!!-----dammit, I  H-A-T-E  if and/or when you think like that...

mike

It is a poem to be enjoyed visually as well as intellectually.

nice pyramid

louis

Novel and heartbreaking. Great job! 

Always enjoy shape poems.  Like the way it struggles to mean something until the last line,
as our lives too mean nothing to us, but are sometimes left for others to make sense of.

A very nice concrete poem.

Rick

lol, that's so perfect blunt o' whatever the flavor of the computer gods is, I think I shall rename this poem 'Christmas Eve' and so it shall be done, in my usual sloth like ways.

I like the way my eye starts with the first letter then rushes down the page as the sentence blossoms.

Quote from: Eamonn S on October 05, 2007, 02:17:18 PM
I like it the way it is, adding more lines would be superfluous. Why add something nobody will read?

We should all, always ask ourselves this question.

Ah, my next xmas card greeting, brought back from the dead, much like myself, just slap those electric paddles to my breasts and bam! I'm back! Eamonn is the cheese and I'm the macaroni btw, fabuloso statement my friend

Funny... I thought it looked like a sail, which worked beautifully for me.
Clever.
take care~dale

BREATHLESS.  AWSOME.  FINE TOUCH, KEEN EYES, BRIGHT MIND.

thanks......

Maybe I should sort of explain the above so people do not think it is just compliment which it is
but to back it up:

At one time of my life I had to make a choice of writing or painting.  Obviously I made a wrong
choice. Ha-ha. So as to relax my  “write" side of my brain (WHICH the pun would work if it was
not on the left),  and I use the other side to appreciate the visual aspect of the poem.

Now I like negative space in paintings.  A teacher told me once the paining is at the corners. 
For example if you take any square there can  only be one distinct circle that touches all four
sides of that square.  Without considering the mathematical or theological concept embedded
in this idea, my eyes immediately go for the shape of the corners which is essentially an isosceles
triangle with curbed, convex  base.  For me this shape has a lot of ramification in the field
of non-Euclidian geometry and relativistic physics and researches to what exactly is the
contour of the universe.

For me EB’s curved triangle is a reflection of that shape. 

Jesse

Very interesting. Makes me wanna know you in real life.

Take care,

-O

ha ha, no I cause cancer