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On the horizon
« on: October 05, 2007, 08:12:25 AM » by EB

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er even
ver even k
ever even kn
never even kno
d never even know
ld never even know i
uld never even know if
ould never even know if I
would never even know if I d
u would never even know if I di
ou would never even know if I die
you would never even know if I died

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #1 on: October 05, 2007, 09:16:37 AM » by fabric

I like it.
It looks like a picture of life. It kinda builds up a bit, takes a little longer; then it plumets down steeply.
It's a good'un.

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #2 on: October 05, 2007, 10:24:53 AM » by Michael Firewalker

bullshit!

mike

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #3 on: October 05, 2007, 11:34:05 AM » by EB

Hm.

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #4 on: October 05, 2007, 12:16:44 PM » by Eamonn S

Can I steal this and claim it as my own as I ride the wave of internet fame?

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #5 on: October 05, 2007, 12:20:37 PM » by EB

lol....

no.

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #6 on: October 05, 2007, 12:48:35 PM » by Eamonn S

Too late, already submitted this to The Journal of Angst-ridden Poetry for the Chronically Depressed.

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #7 on: October 05, 2007, 12:53:24 PM » by EB

LOLOLOLOLOL

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #8 on: October 05, 2007, 01:32:36 PM » by leo zak

I don't think this is done. It should continue down into a second triangular point that erases back towards the beginning. A giant diamond shape? Yes!

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #9 on: October 05, 2007, 01:44:53 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks

I disagree leo!

It ends at the horizon. Its shape rises up from the horizon like a pyramid. For me the writer is questioning her importance in this life. Here and now.

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #10 on: October 05, 2007, 01:45:20 PM » by EB

shut up!

I had the same thought on the way to work, but I always over do everything, but you think it would work?

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #11 on: October 05, 2007, 01:49:16 PM » by joseph lofgren

I agree with Leo. The mirroring of fleeting thoughts is better portrayed.

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #12 on: October 05, 2007, 02:17:18 PM » by Eamonn S

I like it the way it is, adding more lines would be superfluous. Why add something nobody will read?

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #13 on: October 05, 2007, 02:20:11 PM » by EB

o m y

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Re: On the horizon
« Reply #14 on: October 05, 2007, 02:21:59 PM » by joseph lofgren

Quote from: Eamonn S on October 05, 2007, 02:17:18 PM

I like it the way it is, adding more lines would be superfluous. Why add something nobody will read?

This is such a reasonable and rationale question it sickens me. Thanks for the upset stomach.

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