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he's got
« on: July 24, 2007, 04:51:38 PM » by John Yamrus

he’s got

dark
tenement windows
on 9th street…

peeled plaster
on the walls…

a bedroom,
a bath,
a refrigerator
with 2 moldy pears
sitting in a bowl
on top…

a beat-up
Philco TV
that picks up
channel 29
when the weather’s right…

and the glory
of his life
is this cute
little Puerto Rican
girl
he calls
Jack Daniels
because
she goes down
real
real
smooth.

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Re: he's got
« Reply #1 on: July 24, 2007, 07:05:05 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks

I should know better than to read you while I'm talking to my mom.
How can I tell her what I'm laughing about!

Good one!

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Re: he's got
« Reply #2 on: July 24, 2007, 08:08:24 PM » by larry jordan

Hittin' all cylinders, John. Good to see some new work.

It'll go up for sure.

larry

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Re: he's got
« Reply #3 on: July 24, 2007, 08:37:27 PM » by Lynn Doiron

This poem is at least as smooth as JD and/or the girl. ditto to remarks above. lynn

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Re: he's got
« Reply #4 on: July 25, 2007, 03:21:31 PM » by Vasile Baghiu

A new poem, John! And the same spirit of you in it. Excelent. I enjoyed it!
Vasile

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Re: he's got
« Reply #5 on: July 25, 2007, 03:26:43 PM » by John Yamrus

thanks for moving this one up!
very kind of you...and much appreciated!
john

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Re: he's got
« Reply #6 on: July 25, 2007, 03:58:36 PM » by Rick Stansberger

It's got glide in its slide. I like how it moves.

Rick

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Re: he's got
« Reply #7 on: July 25, 2007, 05:05:39 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks

you so funny rick

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Re: he's got
« Reply #8 on: July 25, 2007, 07:44:56 PM » by Laura

I am thinking this is a funny John.. kinda naughty too said with a "slight" exageration on the naughty part! You make me laugh. Good one.

Laura

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Re: he's got
« Reply #9 on: July 28, 2007, 07:54:55 AM » by milner place

Classic JY.

milner

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Re: he's got
« Reply #10 on: August 08, 2007, 11:17:04 AM » by Sherry Thrasher

Now that is visual imagery. A keeper with an ending I did not expect. Good job...

Sherry

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Re: he's got
« Reply #11 on: August 09, 2007, 07:17:01 AM » by Jay Dougherty

Light and tasty, John. Not one word too many.

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Re: he's got
« Reply #12 on: August 09, 2007, 07:39:41 AM » by milner place

Great to see this up here - just where it should be. Well chosen Jay.

milner

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Re: he's got
« Reply #13 on: August 09, 2007, 08:17:17 AM » by John Yamrus

thanks! what a great surprise this morning!

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Re: he's got
« Reply #14 on: August 09, 2007, 08:21:42 AM » by Jay Dougherty

Quote from: John Yamrus on August 09, 2007, 08:17:17 AM

thanks! what a great surprise this morning!

Aren't you in CA? What is it, 4 a.m. there?

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Re: he's got
« Reply #15 on: August 09, 2007, 08:30:13 AM » by John Yamrus

no, i'm in PA and was just clearing up some stuff. had a tv appearance last night and happily (luckily) there's a ton of e-mails!

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Re: he's got
« Reply #16 on: August 09, 2007, 09:50:31 PM » by Michael Firewalker

well, ain't he a lucky old coot, though? God bless his sweet dick, anyways...

michael

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Re: he's got
« Reply #17 on: August 11, 2007, 04:34:33 PM » by StellaR

magic! love it

Stella

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Re: he's got
« Reply #18 on: August 15, 2007, 07:38:39 AM » by jamesthomashoward

That ending has a certain film noir/detective comic book feel to it. 'What a broad...'

Nice work.

James

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Re: he's got
« Reply #19 on: December 14, 2007, 07:41:25 PM » by n.m.rai

Am trolling through the archives here. Dark humor well done. Sounds like New York.

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Re: he's got
« Reply #20 on: October 12, 2011, 02:35:48 PM » by John Yamrus

kust noticed that someone was reading this old chestnut.
john yamrus

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