I am a young woman a V a Violet with a rectangle pelvis and an arc of a hip. I am thin limbs, elongated, angling, pointing toward you. The carefully wrapped package instructed to wear sexy clothes. There is a scalloped lace edge on this top, do you like it, what do you say? And my legs are awkward but my hands want to touch so I try, I let them, I try, I try. I am a woman a V a Violet a curve a half-lit moon. Panicking when you look away quickly I look at you with green eyes get into me. An insecurity breathes chokingly from lungs and forms words for this mouth, this one. I was born from a womb and live my life waiting to be taken to a moment. Thinking now am I beautiful enough, feeling like water inside. Need you touching my back my waist, not just me picking up the rubber glove of your hand and placing it onto my thigh. I am a woman a V a Violet an unfolded flower for you to feel. You need petals pressed to your cheek you need the one that comes after U you need to wrap around these leaves that could break if you look at them wrong.

Adriana DiG.:

Lots to love about this "Woman, V, Violet" piece.  Here we see a poem which, at first glance, may appear to be 'all prose / text' sans 'poetry'.  However, every successive line develops this piece -- akin to the manner in which timing of 'solution dips' (and quality thereof) can enhance a photograph [of the old school 'film' variety]. 

Parallels, repetition, connotation, et cetera, coupled with a brilliant close [i.e., "I am a woman a V a Violet an unfolded flower for you to feel. You need petals pressed to your cheek you need the one that comes after U you need to wrap around these leaves...] take this work from "paragraph" to "poem" with the gas pedal firmly on go!

Definitely well done.  Take care.

Carol Elizabeth

Got to admire this, Adriana, despite being put off by the preamble. (Couldn't care less whether it's been admired by George Wallace, blessed by the Pope, or burnt by the Inquisition). Well done.

milner

Superb. This poem is a real treat to read aloud. 

I agree with everything the others have said. Lose the intro (and enjoy hearing all over again how it's a nice piece, etc., or take the risk that someone will say it's not).

Mea Culpa.  I don't know what I was thinking when I wrote that "preamble."  I guess I just wanted to provide some context for posting it in the first place, since it's kind of an odd piece.  It was a silly contest anyway, though George is a pretty terrific guy who has done a great deal for poetry on Long Island and NYC.

Jay or Milner...Can someone delete that wicked preamble?

look at you with green eyes get into me.

Was something missing here?

Good read. Agree with others. Work is both preceded and followed by credentials.
Wow is me. High polished knuckles. You can be confident enough in the work.

Take care.  D

To make changes on a poem already posted - bring it up, find MODIFY, click on that and you can work your wicked way on it. Click on SAVE and it's done.

Had a pleasant meeting with Georga Wallace when we read together over here, in Leeds, ' bout a year ago.

milner

It was my turn to pick the front page poem this week, and there were many very good poems to choose from--I had a tough time deciding. Finally I chose this for its uniqueness.

Super choice!

I like it because it is not like those "love" poems... I would say it's a very fine piece of poetry, Adriana.
Vasile

I am truly thankful for everyone's comments and for the kind, honest and constructive responses.  This is a truly special community of talent.

XO
Adriana

This is an excellent poem. Graphic, descriptive, interesting, beautifully constructed. Erotic, provocative, sensitive, sensual. But much more than this...

At first glance, because of the layout, it doesn't look like a poem, but it definitely READS like a poem, which poses some (age old?) questions... like what is a poem?

This (to me) IS a poem, though not set out like a poem.

Conversely, how many pieces that we write are laid out as poems but are really short, short stories, essays, prose?

Thanks for sharing this gorgeously sensual piece.

Andrew

PS I must have missed the preamble! Obviously not needed.

I've been away for a while -- what a wow poem, I mean WOWfantasticpoem.  lynn