Casey, I can't say I take anything at all from L5, but I like thinking of the "elderly bone" as a "still dancer." Tom

Sharp, Casey, though for me it would be sharper without 'one of nature's tokens'.

milner

Tom and Milner,

Thank you for looking.  I took out the one of nature's tokens line.  This brings the elderly bone adjacent to the still dancer image.  I think it works better this way so thanks.  I cut a lot out, then put back, now a little cut.

Casey,

For me this piece is now sharp and beautiful - well written and well whitled!

Roger

thanks Roger