significance of memory is destitute
from the unlit eyes of
silent faces,

sunlight no more will flex the vibrant iris.
occipital acceptance required for creation of future remembrances,
darkens, while ashen husks show the emotions
of times eluded to recall.

frozen images of the past and future captured in the present;
individual distinction
and
group heterogeneity.
     

dear Mark

it is a pleasure to become acquainted with your pen


group heterogeneity
http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2012/01/04/yayoi-kusamas-obliteration-room_n_1183830.html


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Welcome Mark! While I'm enjoying the cluttered feel of using so many adjectives and jargon terms I feel that the poem's themes become subservient to the clutter. The effect then becomes more of a novelty than a tool. Just my initial opinion!

Thank you

Grant Hi

Does my profile picture work with the words now? Just something Im working with

Welcome back Mark.  Interesting read!

I'm afraid I don't understand any of this, really, Mark. Tom

Sorry Mark, are you trying to match verbosity as a sign of age, or is that a celebrity with whom I'm unfamiliar?

Lavonne Hi and thanks, Tom, hey, we sometimes dont get it all, Grant, neither. I am glad it is working in the way I suspected, below is an outline of what it is. I worked with Susan Dobson on a piece for display, the picture is one of her series, below is the explanation.

Rememory
 


In this series, I have chosen to deliberately subvert traditional expectations of portraiture by asking my subjects to close their eyes. Each person is asked to recall a past event of personal significance, thereby physically inverting and psychologically internalizing their gaze. To encourage each person to negotiate an imaginary mind space free of the camera's appraising gaze, the photographs are made in complete darkness.
The work's title invokes historian Pierre Nora's description of memory as malleable, and in a continuous process of metamorphosis and adaptation. Nora refers to memory not as an act of remembrance, but rather as a feature of the past shaped by the present. Engaging in the act of rememory, my subjects were asked to consciously recall moments from their pasts, while unfailingly, they remain aware of the present, wound within the conspicuous circumstances of the photography session.
Tantamount to the subject's experience is the historic evolution of the photographic medium itself and our contemporary conception of it. Although each portrait was taken using a traditional model view camera and film, the negatives were scanned for digital output via the most current and technologically advanced hardware. Within this interplay of past and present, the subtle toning and shallow depth of field of the soft black and white images evoke the melancholy of Victorian era post-mortem photography, whereas scale and presentation posit the images firmly in the present, instigating a dialogue between the two--a rememory of sorts.

Susan Dobson

before I read your explanation, I was picturing a nursing home.
wonderful writing, Mark. impressive, to say the least


Stella

Stella. Thank you

Interesting that it worked both before and after the explanation, in different ways. Intriguing.

milner

Milner, I love your intrigue

I found this a little too wordy. Over-complicated & a tad vague in it's delivery. Not sure you need both modifiers in the opening line - either unlit or silent would do for me. L2 S2 I found to be a bit of a blocker, with some trimming back of this one line it could open up the whole thing up.
Mike

Mike Hi thanks for the input, some I can see and appreciate as it comes from the writer, the other comes from the critic. There is a huge difference between unlit and silent, especially to the deaf and blind, are you lucky enough to perceive the third dimension? The way the subject of death is delivered to society (in general) is definately vague. In English, adverbs and adjectives prototypically function as modifiers, but they also have other functions. Moreover, other parts of speech (or even entire phrases or clauses) can function as modifiers, having a brother as an English Professor can be a chore.

Mark