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December 23, 2011, 07:48:26 PM »
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Rick Stansberger
Though everyone looks to the sky.
Return comes up from the ground.
No bells or haleluiahs.
Weeds unfurl their trumpets.
Red carpet gathers seeds and burrs.
The carpet the Spirit treads is green.
Green, green.
Every cloud shapes a welcome home.
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December 23, 2011, 08:39:50 PM »
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Robin B. Lipinski
Ha, loved it. Break out the Roundup and let loose the spigot of moonshine.
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December 23, 2011, 10:25:36 PM »
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Tom Riordan
Like this, Rick! Tom
Quote from: Rick Stansberger on December 23, 2011, 07:48:26 PM
Though everyone looks to the sky.
Return comes up from the ground.
No bells or haleluiahs.
Weeds unfurl their trumpets.
Red carpet gathers seeds and burrs.
The carpet the Spirit treads is green.
Green, green.
Every cloud shapes a welcome home.
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December 27, 2011, 10:07:29 AM »
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Tom Riordan
Quote from: Rick Stansberger on December 23, 2011, 07:48:26 PM
Though everyone looks to the sky.
Return comes up from the ground.
No bells or haleluiahs.
Weeds unfurl their trumpets.
Red carpet gathers seeds and burrs.
The carpet the Spirit treads is green.
Green, green.
Every cloud shapes a welcome home.
Again enjoying the great idea at the center of this poem, Rick. Would it make sense to switch lines 3 & 4. To me, because of the nature of L1-2, 3-4 reads as if there's a "but" between them, which works better the other way around?
What is the red carpet? Tom
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December 27, 2011, 10:47:01 AM »
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milner place
Enjoyed, Rick, and contemplating our conception of 'weeds', and how best to fertilise same.
milner
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December 30, 2011, 08:37:39 AM »
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silent lotus
dear Rick
enjoying here the inspirational gifts of sprouting weeds.
silent lotus
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December 30, 2011, 10:07:29 AM »
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Rohith
Ah! I see the scene. Loved it.
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December 30, 2011, 11:11:04 AM »
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Ross Johnson
Yeah man, nice poem. Especially that 2nd verse,
No bells or haleluiahs.
Weeds unfurl their trumpets.
very nice.
Ross
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December 30, 2011, 10:11:43 PM »
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Scott Douglas
nice
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December 31, 2011, 06:25:45 AM »
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Roger Fizzerton
Beautiful green rush!
Roger
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December 31, 2011, 04:41:29 PM »
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Michael Ashley
I love the first half, but found the third couplet is hard going I got a little lost, I think I understand where you are coming from, maybe just needs something more to pull it back to Earth. I love the final image - of clouds shaping welcome homes!
Nice one.
Mike
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January 04, 2012, 09:57:55 PM »
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Rick Stansberger
Thanks, Tom, for your keen thinking.
Siwtching L3 and 4 could work. I'll try it. The red carpet is status, prestige, the measurement of people against each other. Nature seeks to reclaim it in favor of the green carpet that grows just because. I guess. Hell, I don't know. I just write 'em.
Rick
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January 04, 2012, 09:59:03 PM »
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Rick Stansberger
Milner, Robin, silent, thanks!
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January 04, 2012, 10:00:47 PM »
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Rick Stansberger
Rohith, Ross, Scott, Roger,
Thanks!
Rick
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January 04, 2012, 10:03:41 PM »
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Rick Stansberger
Michael, the red carpet does come out of nowhere. I think of it as the tendency to measure people against each other, as opposed to the green carpet, which is nature's way of just accepting. Anyone can walk the green carpet. Only the privileged ones get the red.
Rick
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