I have
observed
a reversion
to the wild;
the sounds,
the ivy,
the shrubs,
the trees,
shelter
feral
houses.

W, I like this, the surprising image of the last lines lovely. Tom

Thanks Tom

Enjoyed... thematically, I'd like the 'houses' separated from the 'wild.'

I would take the 'the' out of 'the feral / houses' and change it to 'for feral' or something. That's just me though. We have the, the, the, the, the for wild, so remove the 'the' for non-wild. Does this make any sense?

Good one.

I agree
I took the 'the' out without replacing
Does that make sense?

Thanks R L

to me yes, and works better metrically to my ear. Good write sir.

After shortening, the 3 one word lines at end seem melodramatic to me now. What about something plainer?

I have observed
reversion to the wild;
the sounds, the ivy,
the shrubs, the trees,
shelter feral houses.

Hi W,

Nice piece - I like the punctuation, and the repeated 'the', (my sort of thing), and the contrast with the plain feral is great - as is 'feral houses'.

Roger 

Thanks Roger

I really like this, the title and the poem. It produced some beautiful but sad images!

 Adam

Thanks Adam

enjoyed the poem. it made one feel it could be the theme poem for the protesters against wall street living in the parks sipping on melted snow and then growing bored, went to Starbucks for a latte.

Thanks Robin

much enjoyed this piece, wk


Stella

thanks Stella