It came in through the window,
cooled my arm, my upper thigh.

This isn't a simple rain, it's yesterday's science,
today's liquidity, tomorrow's richer air.


* What I was actually doing in the store was repeating the poem over and over to myself—no paper, no pen. 42 total raindrops.

Such pleasure in S1, Maggie, which carries over to the optimistic, transformative statement of S2. For me, the challenge of S2 is sharpened if "simple" is cut. Tom

What about saying: This isn't a simple rain, Tom? I think it pulls it together.

great pen, Maggie
love the note you added to the poem

This feels to me like a question you should answer, Maggie, as there's more to this poem in your head than meets my eye, and why shouldn't there be? It works. Tom

i like this, Maggie,
i didn't connect
with the 'today's liquidity'.

thanks,

tiko

Great word, "liquid", originally just an adjective, then a noun too.
"This isn't a simple rain" isn't a simple phrase. "This isn't simply rain" - "This isn't a simple rain" - "This isn't simple rain" - "This isn't rain" - so many choices, each different.

I know. I know. I know.
Thanks for looking again. Tom.

Maggie, you're a posting machine.....I can't catch up and yet I don't want to miss any - some of these little bits will become picks for me if others don't beat me to them (which they probably will)

so nice to see you around and I love these little condensed storms of verse.....just my type.

M