she spoke with wisdom
far beyond her fragile years

I just couldn’t get past the spinach
dangling from her teeth

hahah! james!
love it


Stella

thanks stella

glad you enjoyed it

regards

james

Don't think you need the comma after spinach, James. maggie

This is lovely, James! In L1, you might either cut "such" or add a comma at "wisdom", the oddness (to my ear) of the construction you have is distracting. -Tom

james after working with geriatrics for two years this takes me right back to the beige sea shell cafe, ah the smell of the applesauce and okra.  i think you could very well scratch 'such' and not loose a thing.  lawrence

excelllent, James.

tiko

Thank you, James.
Good job.


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thanks tom

i have made the suggested change

much appreciated

james

thanks maggie

the change is in effect

cheers

james

thanks lawrence

appreciate the comments and suggestions

cheers

james

thanks tiko

glad you enjoyed it

cheers

james

thanks dax

all the best

cheers

james

lol!

thanks rick

glad you liked it

cheers

james