thanks, Stella.

tiko

Tiko, as I said, I like reading this as addressed to the torturer, so I'd leave that last S off, ending strongly on "positioned to record" -- just me? -- dunno. Tom

when i consider it according your interpretation, the reading is stronger.
the statement and the scene gets darker, more desperate.  i like it.
and as i believe in trying on things (outside of curried/yogurted/sour creamed
food and pink shirts), i'll give it a run. 

thanks for your interest in this being the best it can be.  i appreciate it.

tiko

Well, if you're happy with it, I sure am, Tiko. to Picks. Tom

i am happy with it.  
the chalk outline just
seemed out of place
when you consider the
picture you presented to
me.  and, when it was
removed, it worked it's way
back to the title so well.  
the last stanza came across
as trying to do too much.

your suggestion was spot on,
and i'm happy to have received
it.  it's why i'm not shy about
trying things on.

thanks for the pick as well.  

tiko