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  Re: Wash Day, Valle Guadalupe
« Reply #30 on: September 16, 2010, 01:52:35 PM » by Lynn Doiron
thanks tom and tiko.  missed these last two comments and the move -- much appreciated.  i'm still considering suggestions offered along the way.  thanks, all.

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  Re: Wash Day, Valle Guadalupe
« Reply #31 on: September 23, 2010, 05:12:15 PM » by Tom Riordan
Lynn, I wonder if Richard Wright's "bend in strange winds, respond to the warmth of other suns, and perhaps, to bloom" from Black Boy, and Isabel Wilkerson's (wonderful) new book on the South-North migration, The Warmth of Other Suns, might have any bearing on your last line. Tom
A white pick-up, creased with rust,
parked alongside a washboard road
with a washing machine weighting the truck bed.  
A power pole marks a driveway’s end.  There’s
a cable looped down and plugged in, hijacking
current from above.  And a garden hose
filling the tub.  A woman stands on
the tailgate, sorts whites from colors,
an earlier load spread over fence lines
to dry on the way to being worn under
another sun.





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  Re: Wash Day, Valle Guadalupe
« Reply #32 on: September 23, 2010, 05:20:05 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Not intentionally, Tom.  But very cool if the phrasing takes a reader's thinking off into other directions/connections.
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