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It Was Sort of Like That
« on: August 23, 2010, 05:13:06 PM » by Rick Stansberger

but only sort of

and since he couldn't explain
exactly how it was different
and why the difference was so crucial
he had to let them go on thinking
it was something it wasn't

which got annoying when
some of them figured out
it wasn't what
they thought he'd said it was
and started thinking
that he didn't know either

but he did know
and he knew he knew
because he could ride his knowledge
down the street
sort of like a unicycle made of air

and when they saw him
they thought
he must know something
they didn't know
and got mad at him
for not sharing it.

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Rick's fifth book is out: Gizmo--love, loss and the passion to know--in the first part of the last century.

Re: It Was Sort of Like That
« Reply #1 on: August 23, 2010, 05:24:43 PM » by Tom Riordan

This is great fun, Rick. Think you could nix that period in middle as well as parentheses -- with "though" maybe -- for texture. Tom

Quote from: Rick Stansberger on August 23, 2010, 05:13:06 PM

but only sort of
and since he couldn't explain
exacly how it was different
and why the difference was so crucial
he had to let them go on thinking
it was something it wasn't
which got annoying when
some of them figured out
it wasn't what
they thought he'd said it was
and started thinking
that he didn't know either.
But he did know
and he knew he knew
because he could ride his knowledge
down the street like
a unicycle made of air
(which of course it wasn't)
and when they saw him
pedaling the air
they thought
he must know something
they didn't know
and got mad at him
for not sharing it.

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Re: It Was Sort of Like That
« Reply #2 on: August 23, 2010, 09:38:37 PM » by Rick Stansberger

I'll try it sans punct, Tom.

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Re: It Was Sort of Like That
« Reply #3 on: August 23, 2010, 09:41:56 PM » by Rick Stansberger

did some stanzification, too

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Re: It Was Sort of Like That
« Reply #4 on: August 25, 2010, 08:50:37 PM » by Lynn Doiron

Really like this, Rick. Oh! and my copies of Stark arrived today! Thanks!

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Re: It Was Sort of Like That
« Reply #5 on: August 25, 2010, 10:21:53 PM » by Rick Stansberger

You're welcome, Lynn! Thanks for all your good help with them and with my other poems.

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Rick's fifth book is out: Gizmo--love, loss and the passion to know--in the first part of the last century.

Re: It Was Sort of Like That
« Reply #6 on: August 25, 2010, 10:38:40 PM » by Tiko Lewis

i'll be picking this.

tiko

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...i don't eat jelly beans afterward.

Re: It Was Sort of Like That
« Reply #7 on: August 25, 2010, 10:47:40 PM » by Quentin Kirk

You must have been in military intelligence also...........Q

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Re: It Was Sort of Like That
« Reply #8 on: August 26, 2010, 08:34:58 AM » by Rick Stansberger

Thanks, Tiko. Q, I'm in education -- I guess the situations are similar.

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Rick's fifth book is out: Gizmo--love, loss and the passion to know--in the first part of the last century.

Re: It Was Sort of Like That
« Reply #9 on: August 26, 2010, 08:58:41 AM » by Tiko Lewis

picked.

tiko

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