I love 'disguised by humor' -- right on point.  And 'to climb stairs' reads simply for me anyway you put it, really, but the closer in version is easier on the eye, I suppose.  Very fine writing, Stella.

cheryl

Stella, Go bacik to your original "to climb stairs". It works and works well.

Consider ending with sage eyes and humid lashes. (Brilliant image) What's there now sounds a bit cliché.

Nice. Maggie

disguised by humour
the wanderer stirs

             stairs
     climb
to

later
  to bathe
brush
  shake
 
and press
a smile to

sage eyes
and
humid lashes

a solid pick, Stella.

thanks,

tiko

thanks for pulling this one out of the dust, tiko

I hadn't realized how many responses I'd missed and also that it had been picked
thank you!

appreciate your words, Rick

nice to hear from you, Lynn. thanks

it was meant to express the strange moods/humours of the subject, Larry. humour precedes the wandering. do you think I should rework that line? anyway, thanks. good eye.

I guess you didn't have a problem with the line, cheryl. thank you for such a kind review.

Maggie, you are an amazing editor. I mean that. love what you've suggested!
will adopt those changes.



Stella

Stella, good revision here, despite pain of cutting that last S. Tom