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« on: May 09, 2010, 10:09:13 AM » by Tom Riordan

jump, then look.it's asurpriseparty.h-a-appydeathday

(cheryl) o my heavens this is a bit overly surprising

push open the doorjump into the dark thenlook. it'san octet of tadpoles

(doris) princess in Clumsy Hans can't find a full grown frog to kiss

push open the doorjump into the dark thentry not tolook disappointed

(tiko) gives tadpoles areasonfor frowns on blankfaces

pushopen jumpingtadpoles.a particularly labile effort

(doris) sinking feeling in the morning finding tadpoles dead

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Re: jump,
« Reply #1 on: May 09, 2010, 10:19:34 AM » by jamesthomashoward

bleak, tom. I get a faulty parachute scenario.

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Cough.

push
« Reply #2 on: May 09, 2010, 10:27:37 AM » by Tom Riordan

James, thank you. Revised. Tom

Quote from: Tom Riordan on May 09, 2010, 10:09:13 AM

jump,







   then
   look.



it's a
surprise
party.



h-a-appy
deathday!

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Re: push
« Reply #3 on: May 09, 2010, 11:23:07 AM » by cherylleverette

o my heavens. this is a bit overly surprising with the 'death' party. are you ok, today, Tom?

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A poet dares be just so clear and no clearer.... He unzips the veil from beauty, but does not remove it. A poet utterly clear is a trifle glaring. ~E.B. White

Re: push
« Reply #4 on: May 09, 2010, 11:41:07 AM » by Tom Riordan

"a bit overly surprising" - I like that phrase, Cheryl. Why would I be okay today? LOL. Tom

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Re: push
« Reply #5 on: May 09, 2010, 12:11:02 PM » by cherylleverette

cause you're always ok.

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A poet dares be just so clear and no clearer.... He unzips the veil from beauty, but does not remove it. A poet utterly clear is a trifle glaring. ~E.B. White

Re: push
« Reply #6 on: May 09, 2010, 05:04:38 PM » by cherylleverette

Just figured this one out. You woke up this morning, realized it was Mother's Day and your mom is 'Mommie Dearest' or maybe your wife is, and you forgot it was Mother's Day. Oh no!

lol

Just kidding of course.

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A poet dares be just so clear and no clearer.... He unzips the veil from beauty, but does not remove it. A poet utterly clear is a trifle glaring. ~E.B. White

Re: push
« Reply #7 on: May 15, 2010, 08:38:32 AM » by Tom Riordan

Quote from: Tom Riordan on May 09, 2010, 10:09:13 AM


push


   open
   the door



jump



   into
   the dark
   

    then




look



   it's a surprise party

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Re: push
« Reply #8 on: May 15, 2010, 01:31:01 PM » by cherylleverette

tadpoles ... don't know about this, unless you are wishing unpleasantness upon the jumper. just think how slimy and slithering a swarm of tadpoles would be.

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A poet dares be just so clear and no clearer.... He unzips the veil from beauty, but does not remove it. A poet utterly clear is a trifle glaring. ~E.B. White

Re: push
« Reply #9 on: May 15, 2010, 02:48:17 PM » by Tom Riordan

Yes. well, as is evident by this point, this is a particularly labile effort! We'll see where it takes me. Tom

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Re: push
« Reply #10 on: May 15, 2010, 06:07:15 PM » by cherylleverette

labile -- prone to chemical change. new word. thanks. very cool idea. lessee what can it change to next? wouldn't it be interesting if you could somehow show that?

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A poet dares be just so clear and no clearer.... He unzips the veil from beauty, but does not remove it. A poet utterly clear is a trifle glaring. ~E.B. White

Re: push
« Reply #11 on: May 15, 2010, 10:24:26 PM » by Tom Riordan

well, that's definitely an idea to think about. thanks, C. Tom

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Re: push
« Reply #12 on: May 16, 2010, 08:00:36 AM » by Doris Chance

I get Clumsy Hans' princess who can't even find a fully grown frog to kiss... Ish. Enjoyed.

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Yes. I don't read poetry.

Re: push
« Reply #13 on: May 16, 2010, 08:50:07 AM » by Tom Riordan

Funny, Doris. Who knows? Thanks for peek. Tom

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Re: push
« Reply #14 on: May 16, 2010, 10:37:22 PM » by Tom Riordan

Quote from: Tom Riordan on May 09, 2010, 10:09:13 AM


push


   open
   the sky



jump



   into
   the dark
   



look



   a surprise
                party of
                tadpoles

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