Duncan came down
from the corrie,
leading the black pony
with the dead stag
across its back
and the fat client
trailing behind.

He wished
it was
the other way
round.

Hey Milner,

Enjoying the wit of this one...imparticular the image and message communicated with such brevity. I wonder about that word "wishes" and wonder if you might be considering other options...perhaps, "imagines"? I like the word "wishes" there, but am curious if something else is more accurate and telling.

A fine scene, Milner. Tom

nothing to add milner - enjoyed.

man, you are on such a roll lately!
good for you!
john

so Duncan reappears.  how very cool.

looking forward to,
cheryl

Thanks, Joe. I think 'wishes' expresses his thought pretty well. But I'll ponder on.

Tom, Daryl, John, Cheryl, your thumbs up much appreciated. You pushed me to this, Cheryl, so a special thanks.

Cheers

milner

Milner is one of the very few who truly understands that you don't have to say everything in order to say it all.  he SUGGESTS more than most writers ever say.
john

Wow, John, many thanks. I do try not to underestimate my audience.

milner

this is just too good to wait on...i couldn't resist moving it to the front page, once again with the comment that some writers try and say it all in a poem...milner is content to say just enough.

congrats, Milner! Tom

Bravo!

congrats milner, great poem!

love it
great choice for Front Page
congratulations, milner


Stella

as the guy who chose to put up this poem, i have to pat myself on the back and say that i'm kinda like Hugh Heffner...i know talent when i see it!