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man v. bug
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March 10, 2010, 10:18:36 AM »
by
Tom Riordan
man got a bug in him
bug say, Leave, leave
but man think, Don't got
to listen to no bug, I'm
gonna be a man & stay
bug say, Every day I'm
gonna bite your heart
until ain't nothing left
Okay, man say, You
just go on bite away
bug bite & man flinch
bug bite again & he
flinch again & bug
keep biting everyday
he keep on flinching
his wife say, Why you
flinching & he say, Ain't
flinching & she say,
Everyday you flinching,
you got the bug to leave?
man say, Man got a lot
of bugs but that don't
mean he gonna leave
she say, Don't want no
man who wanna leave
he say, It just the bug
that wanna leave but
the man he gonna stay
she say, He betta stay
I kick his bug butt out
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March 10, 2010, 10:47:07 PM »
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Lawrence Gladeview
tom thanks for the late night laugh, if only you wrote for leno or letterman then maybe i would give a damn about them. this piece is smart-ass and humorous. i know it breaks form, but have you considered a question mark to end S4? how written now i tripped just a touch on that transition into S5, although it might have just been my speedy eyes. lawrence
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March 10, 2010, 11:09:23 PM »
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Tom Riordan
Lawrence, thanks for the look, very glad you enjoyed. Did a bit of work there in that rough spot, incl. the ? mark, the form will just have to man up & weather it! Appreciate the careful read. Tom
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March 11, 2010, 03:01:26 AM »
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Jamie Foster
An enjoyable poem with a lot of humor. Love it and the laugh I recieved.
Jamie
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March 11, 2010, 08:56:30 AM »
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Tom Riordan
Jamie, appreciate your reading and reporting, and glad you liked it. Thanks, Tom
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