a bite
a slight bite
on the inside
of your elbow

a scratch on the
outside of your
thigh

a stretch
a yawning stretch
in your hips


knees back
                 back
                      further

now we can
dance

you're developing such a great touch with repetitions, Tiko.

Hi Tiko, this is really something.  Very erotic.  Like the 'touche' title too, but like this one as well.  Awesome with repetition, as Tom said.

Is 'no' supposed to be 'now', or is it 'no, we can dance' in the last verse.  Nevertheless, still good.

wonderful job,
cheryl

thanks tom, appreciate the affirmation.


cheryl,

its supposed to be no.  glad you like it.  it was my turn.

tiko

tiko, I have to confess...I don't understand what 'no we can dance' is leading to, or what it means.  Trying, though.

cheryl

if you don't understand it, then it doesn't work.  no has been changed to now for the feedback. hope you like it.

thanks,

tiko

yes, that makes more sense to me.  and I agree with you.  if the reader can't understand it, it's not working.  funny sometimes, not everyone does  cheryl

ditto tom's praise of your skill with repetitions, tiko. 
change of pace title not working for me, but a pick nonetheless.

ld

Lynn,

thanks very much.  i have no idea where the use of repetitions came from, but i'm pleased to hear it's working. 

thanks for picking this.  i will consider a new title.

tiko