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Baloney, mayo, and memories
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February 16, 2010, 07:48:27 AM »
by
cherylleverette
back in the day
folks don't buy mayonnaise
they make their own
at a slow boil
on a wood stove
with eggs, milk and vinegar
Grandma buys baloney
sliced from a log
as a special treat
before the
'end of school'
picnic
with homemade mayo
for my mom and Uncle Al
-once a year
I'm five years old
when Daddy picks Grandma
up from
Greyhound Bus Stop
Mama makes her a baloney sandwich
she eats it like sirloin steak
her lips smacking
and her teeth clicking
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Re: Baloney, mayo, and memories
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February 16, 2010, 12:34:05 PM »
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Tom Riordan
Love the "lips smacking and her teeth clicking," Cheryl, and this whole meditation on baloney and mayo down through the generations. Makes me want to go get some. A couple edit thoughts: S2 seems out of chronology somehow, "back in the day" and "turkey bologna", for example; that whole S could be cut, I think. And seems odd to add "Cochrane" to same grandma's name in last S; nor is it clear if this is N's other grandma. -Tom
Quote from: cherylleveretteİ on February 16, 2010, 07:48:27 AM
back in the day
folks don't buy mayonnaise
they make their own
at a slow boil
on a wood stove
with eggs, milk and vinegar
serve it with
beef and turkey bologna
Kosher
and
Halal
German
and even
Lebanon
and of course
there's
Oscar M-a-y-e-r
Grandma buys baloney
sliced from a log
as a special treat
for the
'end of school'
picnic
with homemade mayo
to my mom and Uncle Al
-once a year
I'm five years old
when Daddy picks Grandma Cochrane
up from
Greyhound Bus Stop
Mama makes her a baloney sandwich
she eats it like sirloin steak
her lips smacking
and her teeth clicking
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Re: Baloney, mayo, and memories
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February 16, 2010, 01:08:11 PM »
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cherylleverette
Quote from: Tom Riordan on February 16, 2010, 12:34:05 PM
Love the "lips smacking and her teeth clicking," Cheryl, and this whole meditation on baloney and mayo down through the generations. Makes me want to go get some. A couple edit thoughts: S2 seems out of chronology somehow, "back in the day" and "turkey bologna", for example; that whole S could be cut, I think. And seems odd to add "Cochrane" to same grandma's name in last S; nor is it clear if this is N's other grandma. -Tom
Okie dokie, will take the snips to it. I knew there was something wrong with it but not sure what. It was in the workshop for awhile but I forgot about it too. Forgot about alot of poems there.
The second stanza is a result of me trying to add a little to the thought of bologna, but maybe baloney doesn't need it.
Thanks much,
cheryl
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Re: Baloney, mayo, and memories
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February 20, 2010, 11:11:35 AM »
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Tom Riordan
cheryl, still enjoying this poem a lot. but a bit hung up by the "to" in S2. tom
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February 20, 2010, 12:05:31 PM »
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Rick Stansberger
I'm getting old. I remember those days. Now we're the United States of Arugula, with all KINDS of exotics right there on the supermarket shelf. I liked my baloney fried, so it would form a pocket in the middle, and they thought I was exotic on Oak Street when I liked ketchup AND mustard on my hotdog.
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February 20, 2010, 12:08:15 PM »
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Tom Riordan
we friend "baloney-cheese-baloney" melting a velveeta slice in the middle. that's it! i DO have to go get some.
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February 20, 2010, 03:01:03 PM »
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cherylleverette
Quote from: Tom Riordan on February 20, 2010, 11:11:35 AM
cheryl, still enjoying this poem a lot. but a bit hung up by the "to" in S2. tom
Yeah that 'to' didn't sound right at all. Have no idea what I was thinking. Thanks for pointing it out and for replying to this poem
cheryl
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Re: Baloney, mayo, and memories
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February 20, 2010, 03:03:47 PM »
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cherylleverette
Quote from: Rick Stansberger on February 20, 2010, 12:05:31 PM
I'm getting old. I remember those days. Now we're the United States of Arugula, with all KINDS of exotics right there on the supermarket shelf. I liked my baloney fried, so it would form a pocket in the middle, and they thought I was exotic on Oak Street when I liked ketchup AND mustard on my hotdog.
Well you're not alone, Rick, I remember those little pockets too. We used to cut ours up like a wagon wheel so it would lay flat.
And I like ketchup and cheese on my my hot dog too, and chili, and cheese, and cole slaw....
Thanks so much for bearing with me and participating in a short memory jaunt,
cheryl
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Re: Baloney, mayo, and memories
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February 20, 2010, 03:05:36 PM »
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cherylleverette
Quote from: Tom Riordan on February 20, 2010, 12:08:15 PM
we friend "baloney-cheese-baloney" melting a velveeta slice in the middle. that's it! i DO have to go get some.
velveeta is the best for melting. cheddar the best for taste, but either will do with fried bologna.
thanks again, for sharing your personal menu. very revealing. !!
cheryl
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A poet dares be just so clear and no clearer.... He unzips the veil from beauty, but does not remove it. A poet utterly clear is a trifle glaring. ~E.B. White
Re: Baloney, mayo, and memories
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February 21, 2010, 11:42:57 PM »
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Tom Riordan
to picks
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Re: Baloney, mayo, and memories
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February 23, 2010, 08:55:38 AM »
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cherylleverette
I didn't realize this was here. Thanks so much.
cheryl
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February 26, 2010, 12:21:07 PM »
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cherylleverette
my goodness, shocked my drawers off to see this here. thought I was seeing things, literally. thank you so much.
cheryl
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Re: Baloney, mayo, and memories
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February 26, 2010, 12:52:13 PM »
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Tom Riordan
hey, congrats, cheryl.
'bout time we got some REAL baloney on front page!
tom
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February 26, 2010, 01:07:11 PM »
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cherylleverette
Quote from: Tom Riordan on February 26, 2010, 12:52:13 PM
hey, congrats, cheryl.
'bout time we got some REAL baloney on front page!
tom
lol, now that's funny Tom. thanks very much.
cheryl
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A poet dares be just so clear and no clearer.... He unzips the veil from beauty, but does not remove it. A poet utterly clear is a trifle glaring. ~E.B. White
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February 26, 2010, 01:36:10 PM »
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John Yamrus
big congratulations!
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