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  Beyond Broadwoodwidger
« on: February 09, 2010, 06:47:51 PM » by marc woodward
Let us suppose your car packs up
out here. Beyond Broadwoodwidger,
St Giles On The Heath, Virginstow.
It is night - but here a darkness
that lives on these shapeless acres.
You walk the twisted lane a mile
then seeing lights you cut across.
Fields, hedges, a dark shadowed copse.
Fields, a gate, the woodland edge.

What do you feel? You feel the quiet,
brief, breath of an owl;
silence after the fox's cough.
What do you hear?
You hear the weight
of condensation on the grass,
a vast ocean of bending blades.
A hundred rabbits knew your sound
through the earth, long before the air
announced your voice or waved your scent.

Here there is nothing to save you.
If you lie down now this wet ditch
may be your decomposing place.
Who will find you? Only strangers.
Still the dark place will keep moving,
eating, weatherbound, star stared.
Out here, in the eyes of spiders,
the fright of jays, the quick knee-jerk
of a crickets ear, a moment
considered, passing, forgotten.
The only trace: a disturbance
in the scent blown down from the wood;
an imprint on the retina
of a cow's large soft eye, fading.




Marc Woodward
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  Re: Beyond Broadwoodwidger
« Reply #1 on: February 09, 2010, 07:14:52 PM » by cherylleverette
This is really beautiful, well-written and I love the soft cow's eye in the end.  They do have soft eyes don't they.

Wonderful job, Marc.
cheryl
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  Re: Beyond Broadwoodwidger
« Reply #2 on: February 09, 2010, 09:17:36 PM » by Tom Riordan
Love "weatherbound" and the ending and all of it, Marc. Tom
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  Re: Beyond Broadwoodwidger
« Reply #3 on: February 10, 2010, 03:55:46 PM » by marc woodward
Thanks Cheryl and Tom, glad you enjoyed.
Fwiw Broadwoodwidger is a small village out in the wet green hinterland of north west Devon.  Very rural. I always thought the name sounded Hardy-esque (though not so much as the nearby Broadwood Kelly which sounds like a character from  Far from the Madding Crowd!)

Marc
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« Reply #4 on: February 11, 2010, 03:34:08 PM » by milner place
This a pick for me, Marc.

Cheers

milner
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« Reply #5 on: February 11, 2010, 05:05:13 PM » by Sue Lozynskyj
As soon as I'd read this I looked hoping it hadn't been picked...but Milner got there first.  This is stunning. the title is unassuming, the first line really welcomes the reader into the poem, the form is steady, with good line lengths, and as far as I can judge (it's not my strong point!) accurate and useful punctuation.  The gentle progression through the three not quite equal stanza's echoes the timeless quality of the subject and the language is measured, uncliched (I love the rabbits) and dignified.  I have no suggestions to improve this, and can only sigh WOW!
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  Re: Beyond Broadwoodwidger
« Reply #6 on: February 12, 2010, 04:07:31 AM » by marc woodward
Thanks Milner and Sue, I'm honoured! Appreciate your complimentary comments Sue, glad you liked it.
Marc
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  Re: Beyond Broadwoodwidger
« Reply #7 on: February 14, 2010, 10:36:57 AM » by Kevin Jackson
Marc,  great to see this on the Front Page.  It deepens with each read.

k
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  Re: Beyond Broadwoodwidger
« Reply #8 on: February 14, 2010, 11:30:35 AM » by larry jordan
Wonderful imagery supported by a language that forces the reader to pause, to breathe and gather in pieces of its world. Excellent work, a wonderful read that rings different with each read.

larry
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« Reply #9 on: February 15, 2010, 05:21:58 PM » by Tom Riordan
congrats, Marc! good to read this again here. Tom
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« Reply #10 on: February 16, 2010, 10:03:59 AM » by Sherry Thrasher
This is exactly why I read poetry. Beautiful.

Sherry
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« Reply #11 on: February 16, 2010, 12:53:15 PM » by Lynn Doiron
I've only just read this amazing write, Marc, and the one word after my initial read was 'wow' -- a quiet, sort of awestruck 'wow' that only a ticking clock hears.  This is my way of saying terrific write.  Excellent pick for front window of our pc site. 

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  Re: Beyond Broadwoodwidger
« Reply #12 on: February 16, 2010, 01:44:22 PM » by Sherry Thrasher
Lynn, I read this yesterday and the word I came up with was wow.  I pondered how many languages wow exists in.  It appears that Sue used it earlier.
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It snowed last year too: I made a snowman and my brother knocked it down and I knocked my brother down and then we had tea.
~Dylan Thomas

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  Re: Beyond Broadwoodwidger
« Reply #13 on: February 18, 2010, 06:00:24 AM » by marc woodward
Thanks Kevin, Larry, Tom, Lynn and Sherry, appreciate you taking the time to read it and comment (particularly as you've been so generous!)
And of course very flattered that it was chosen as a Front Page...
All I can say is 'Wow'!
Marc
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