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  Blue Door
« on: January 15, 2010, 02:06:08 PM » by Rick Stansberger
in a brown adobe wall.

The door was always there.
The wall grew up around it.

We all want to see
what's behind the door.

So does the wall.
It doesn't know either.

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Rick's fifth book is out:  Gizmo--love, loss and the passion to know--in the first part of the last century.

  Re: Blue Door
« Reply #1 on: January 15, 2010, 03:03:00 PM » by Lavonne Westbrooks
nuff said.
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  Re: Blue Door
« Reply #2 on: January 15, 2010, 06:29:03 PM » by Tiko Lewis
the title drew me in, and the poem satisfied.

nice poem.

tiko
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...i don't eat jelly beans afterward.

  Re: Blue Door
« Reply #3 on: January 15, 2010, 06:59:44 PM » by Lynn Doiron
This is sharp and in focus. 

I'm not certain on this first read if the final line is needed.  I think I'm there without it.  But then, tomorrow's another read, another slant, another crack to see meaning . ...

ld
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  Re: Blue Door
« Reply #4 on: January 15, 2010, 07:51:33 PM » by J. C. Stairs
I like this too. I left the poem with a feeling of curiosity then felt I had to come back.
Much enjoyed.
JC
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  Re: Blue Door
« Reply #5 on: January 16, 2010, 08:35:31 PM » by Rick Stansberger
Lavonne, Tiko, JC,

Thanks.

Lynn,

Let's try it without the final line and see.
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  Re: Blue Door: two versions
« Reply #6 on: January 16, 2010, 08:42:28 PM » by Tom Riordan
Better without that last line, to me, Rick. It allows for the possibility that the wall grew up around the door to see what was behind it, and that it can or will or might. Saying definitively that it can't just doesn't gives a narrower reading that doesn't make sense to me, so then I go to reread the poem in a more zen-contradiction state of mind -- but there's enough magic in the poem already, I don't want to screw around with it so much at the end. Tom
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  Re: Blue Door: two versions
« Reply #7 on: January 17, 2010, 10:08:40 AM » by cherylleverette
Rick, love the idea of a blue door.  Really like this poem.  Beautiful and mysterious image.  Here are two:



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A poet dares be just so clear and no clearer.... He unzips the veil from beauty, but does not remove it.  A poet utterly clear is a trifle glaring.  ~E.B. White

  Re: Blue Door: two versions
« Reply #8 on: January 18, 2010, 11:07:52 PM » by Rick Stansberger
Lovely pics, Cheryl!  Thanks!
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Rick's fifth book is out:  Gizmo--love, loss and the passion to know--in the first part of the last century.

  Re: Blue Door
« Reply #9 on: January 25, 2010, 06:13:46 AM » by Lavonne Westbrooks
Enjoying this again.
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  Re: Blue Door
« Reply #10 on: January 25, 2010, 06:36:49 AM » by silent lotus
dear Rick

guess i got here after you erased the final line.

my ear feels pleased with how the poem now blossoms.

and of course i set me response in Blue.

smiles

silent lotus

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  Re: Blue Door
« Reply #11 on: January 25, 2010, 10:29:46 AM » by Rick Stansberger
Thanks, Lavonne and SL!

Rick
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  Re: Blue Door
« Reply #12 on: March 05, 2010, 01:17:32 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Today, when I read this, that blue door is the blue sky showing through a door opening in a wall that's forgotten who built it. 

ld
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  Re: Blue Door
« Reply #13 on: March 07, 2010, 11:58:40 AM » by Rick Stansberger
I like your explication, Lynn.  Of course the wall might never know why it was built.  Most people don't confide their plans in walls (lampposts are another story).
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Rick's fifth book is out:  Gizmo--love, loss and the passion to know--in the first part of the last century.

  Re: Blue Door
« Reply #14 on: March 07, 2010, 12:01:42 PM » by Lynn Doiron
I like your explication, Lynn.  Of course the wall might never know why it was built.  Most people don't confide their plans in walls (lampposts are another story).

Nor do most walls confide their plans in people, whereas lampposts are given to lighting up every detail.
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