emma, it really is hard to see so many suggestions made in regard to a poem sincerely written.  sometimes comments have nothing to do with telling you how lovely and perfect everything is, but rather, it's all about how to improve your writing. 

personally, i would much rather get alot of comments like this one has, to help me, rather than my poem just sit, unattended.

cheryl

really good work. I like it a lot. Well done. Best wishes.

Emma, I really like this.  I feel the whole poem is in the firrst 5 lines. (and what a poem!).... everything else is a over-long goodbye.

k

Please don't give up on your poem Emma. I think all of the help offered adds up to one thing....it's a really good piece of work.  I keep reading it....for me the first two verses say it all, but the more I read it, the more I get the whole of it.

Sher

This piece is quite nice.

I like this. Funny how one's perception of this poem is influenced by the perceived gender of the author. Change the he to she, though. Does it still work?