I know exactly what you mean, Michelle.  It's confusing me too! lol  I think it works if the or and what follows is referred back to October, but then again...  :-)

Cheers, my dear

More than interesting, Peter, but very interesting.   Rudeness in your beauty a fine contrast.

Thank you, Cheryl

Grammatically, I think the full sentence only reads if the "or" picks up at "fantasized": as in "I fantasized rudeness..." More to the point, the whole construction is a bit disorienting or hallucinogenic due to its grammatical structure, so the question is: does that work? I think it does. Tom

Yes, I think that works, Tom.  I can only say 'think' because having read the poem quite a few times in last couple of days, it's beginning to go in one side of my grey melon and then get lost somewhere lol.  So I shall leave it for a while and read afresh

Cheers

Phew, I'm glad you said that. I just reread the poem and wondered what on earth I was on about. There might still be a little awkwardness there - I think that must be what Michelle is referring to - but the whole thing reads as a tender swaggering tale of love's piracy. I love "a shanty of buckles".

David

Peter,
I had not yet discovered this site when this was first posted. Much enjoyed.
Glad it came forward.
JC

David and JC, thanks guys, much appreciated

Purely lovely.

Thank you, Doris.  Glad you enjoyed it

think we need this in Picks

Agradecimentos muito, Tom