he sat companioned to soft leather
compact in dog-day slippers
his name somewhere else

goings on go on
argument  discussions  temptation
distress  medical drama
even disaster

his english walls with their
weatherboard scales
no defence

loud prevails
till the power clicks

only breath then
winding down




kj17nov09

well painted, kevin

Stella

Hey Kevin,

I think I like this...I need to read again...I did stumble up on the first line of V2...it feels so ordinary comparatively.

Tim

Like this a lot, Kevin.  Thanks for the read.

lynn

Hey!   Warm thanks Stella, Tim, Lynn, for read and response.  I'm enjoying this pen.  Thinking of trying a group, with this, "The Skittish Man" and some yet to be's.

Tim - you may have caught something re that first line s2... will give it more thought.

k

Good 'un, Kevin. Wonder if the 'only' could come of the penultimate line? Unsure though.

milner

where can i score a pair of those "dog-day slippers"? this sounds great throughout kevin, enjoy the pace and tone here.  in light of tim's comment, maybe fiddle to "perpetually going on"? enjoy this recent voice kevin, keep on it. -lawrence

big thanks milner, appreciate it, will think more about placing of other

big thanks too lawrence,... if i could send you a pair i would  :)  i think those who have them are born with them!
appreciate your thoughts re the line tim highlighted, still considering.... in a way i like the lumpy simplicity of as is...

k

dear SL, many thanks.  this loud man is smiling and dreaming of windmills.

k

ps - have tweaked l1 of s2... to make it work a little harder