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Re: Movements of Almost Athenian Grace
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May 26, 2009, 01:08:18 PM »
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Sue Lozynskyj
Even better John! Well Done. Time for this to move up.
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May 27, 2009, 09:55:14 AM »
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Tom Riordan
Just love the ending. Tom
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October 08, 2009, 02:53:57 PM »
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Sue Lozynskyj
I want this for the front page and will tidy up the notes at the end for the look of the thing so am preserving the whole post here... congratulations John.
Quote from: J. Barrale on May 22, 2009, 03:31:10 PM
Such watches – tautly wound weapons of choice,
their diamond numerals glittering sails, wanderers on seas of glass,
their soul’s science and logic, Greeks who came to plunder –
end the Sundial’s kingdom, and run his people off.
The young, the old, and the slow caught,
spoils and slaves taken, barter and hostage for trade,
with us, their distant future’s Gods.
Such watches – it was Ulysses heart, clever and old,
the loving father that armed each tooth, put helmets on their heads,
and taught each son how to stop the blows of the mighty gear's hammer.
And no one knows who made the first sprocket,
or set its army marching to its jeweled and secret wars.
Such watches – time an island, whose boats flee,
its prince the Cyclops blinded, its monster humbled,
Uranus and Gaia’s son in dark dreams tortured,
his heart kept ticking, its physics bewitched,
and held like sex between the watches' shells.
Such watches – the heavy, ticking breast, more than a she,
her cave is cool at midday, her coils the night winding down
on steel's thin perfections
while the world is stopped, thick as noon,
and green as brass.
Such watches - Glory O Glory Ulysses, the sirens call,
they seem to sing only for you, their songs are figs and green wine,
their beauty the beach as it curls with waves,
the sun that day hot, the air sharp with salt,
and rank with the smell of the penned sheep
ready for slaughter.
Such watches - Glory O Glory Ulysses, see how they sway,
suddenly all thoughts of raids and schemes evaporate from your head,
and as befits a man who is blessed, you are back in Ithaca,
a boy again, in your father's orchards
where the cold, clear, water runs over the stones.
Such watches - Glory O Glory Ulysses, how you've changed,
you are no longer quite the country bumpkin.
And in a moment of almost Athenian grace,
you deftly turn the boat
and again and forever, start over the voyage.
-
John Barrale
** May 26, 2009 - Revision/ Final Version posted
- J. Barrale
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October 08, 2009, 03:25:02 PM »
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Tom Riordan
Congrats, John! Good to reread this. Tom
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October 08, 2009, 03:33:13 PM »
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milner place
The watches were so enigmatic, until reading your notes, John. But the poem still overrode that by it's language and imagery, that even without that revelation, it could yet stand. Good to see it where it now sits proud.
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October 08, 2009, 09:28:23 PM »
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Scott Douglas
What a passionate and sophisticated poem.
I'm happy for this chance to read it again.
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October 08, 2009, 09:52:07 PM »
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david haase
this is a fine piece. I struggle with longer poims, and the minimalist me wants to debone this, but that would not do it justice. congratulations. I will be happy to read this each time I visit.
david
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October 11, 2009, 10:18:14 PM »
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Gabriella Garbo
This is epic! of course, it pertains to one of my most favorite stories! I don't know if she ever posted it here, but Stella wrote a piece about weaving....it wasn't specifically about Penelope, but perhaps we should as her to bring it back up...I saw Penelope between her lines. Anywho...thanks for sharing, and I'm glad this got a pick. Wonderfully composed!
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Re: Movements of Almost Athenian Grace
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October 13, 2009, 07:57:13 PM »
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StellaR
wonderful pick for Front Page
congratulations, John
I am a huge fan of science fiction and loved your explanation of how a cover inspired your poem.
Stella
* just read your reply here, Gabriella. think I have a few about weaving. although I wouldn't want to post my work on John's thread, I am curious which one you mean!
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October 14, 2009, 10:41:34 AM »
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J. Barrale
Hi Sue:
Good Lord!! Thank you Sue. I am truly honored. My apologies for not replying sooner. Haven't been on Poetry Circle for a while as I've been fighting a case of the Blues. But I'm up and about, again. What a nice surprise!!
Best Always,
John
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Poet 49
Re: Movements of Almost Athenian Grace
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October 14, 2009, 10:45:32 AM »
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J. Barrale
Hi StellaR, Gabriella, Tom, Milner, David, and Scott:
Thank you all. made my day!!!
:) :) :)
Best Always,
John
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