*Partially reconstituted.

Completely magnificent, Mike.
I'll take a gross C.O.D.
The period in the title seems weird, bad to me.
-Tom

Super Mike! Love it (agree with Tom about the . )

B.

Not exactly "concrete" but I'll take it. I thought it was a cute idea. Was there supposed to be an asterisk somewhere on the text of the piece being referred to as "partially reconstituted?"

Thanks all.

Hopefully a small edit will kill two birds with one stone.

Thar you go!
Mike, I am definitely going to put this in Picks but let's see if we can stir up a little more comment on this board first. I appreciate how different this form and style are, a real breath of fresh air, but the entire conception and execution is superb and the poem shines brighter than your yellow.
--Tom

Anything that expands the province of poetry beyond the emotion laden lyric is all right in my book, uh kindle.

Rick

quite inspired-- more of such things from you, methinks.

check you out, being interdisciplinary!

Off to Picks now, Mike, lest it slips what's left of my mind! Tom

Wasn't sure how this would be received, so thanks for the comments; very grateful for the pick, Tom.

Going to be a bitch for the anthologisers though...

SL, I like your thinking...