whoever you are
if love
is why
there's singing
in the silence of trees
then
find me     

Whoa! Love it, Jess! Straight to the heart. - Tom

isn't your title a song title?

the poem, I love-

I agree.  This is when length doesn't matter & short isn't anything but beautiful.

Cheryl

BINGO!!!!!  AWESOME!!!!!!!!  DAMN!!!!!!! HOT DAMN!!!!!!!

This is wonderful.

Nice one, Jess. Reading it aloud I found it flowed better if 'there is' is shortened to 'there's'. Might consider taking the 'then' out too, for a similar reason.

Cheers

milner

like that idea milner, thanks. glad this poem was received well :)

ooo  very nice...and dripping in romance
jerry

Jess, really impressed by this one. Excellent.

James

Will take this home to Picks now, Jess. -Tom

thank you

Jess, this has a lot going it for it as a first draft but I don't think it's there yet.


'whoever you are' is an unknown with no relationship to the 'love' the 'me' hears 'singing in the silence of the trees'.

The burden to carry this poem is on the 'me'.

I made some ajustments to what you posted based on sound, Jess.
Lines need to give the reader at least an earful before they end,
stresses need to be in the right place for the line to work.

whoever you are

if love is why
there's singing
in the silence of trees

then find me   

Just a thought, but I would explore this deeper, Jess.

Maggie

Congrats on the pick, Jess.  Just found and read and enjoyed for its staightforward request.  Puts me in a quiet place, a wishful place.  Lovely.

ld

I looked for this.  I looked
and looked and
looked. 

I found it.


Tiko

Congrats, Jess. So good to read this again. Tom

Congrats Jess.  Well deserved.

Tiko

Nice to see you Jess - on the front page!

This poem is a great example of the kind of poetry I like.

I like a poem that takes you There, to That place or reminds you that you've been There before or that you long to go There. I like a poem that weaves sound and words and rhythm together. Elemental details and a simple arrangement on the page.

I want to hear that song. Good one Jess.

thank you all

Lovely Jess,  in the moment welcoming poem.  Great pick.

fantastic front page choice.
well-deserved honour!


Stella

Yeah!

Jess, this is quite lovely.... so much emotion, so lean, beautiful.  Wonderful to see it featured too, well done.

k

Jessie--How lovely. Thank you. Jill

Jess,

Really beautiful poem.  Have loved reading it aloud.  Congratulations on the Front Page pick. It's one after my own heart... just lovely!!

Laura