PoetryCircle
ContemporaryPoetryForum
Welcome, Guest. Please login or register.
« PoetryCircle • The Writing • Front page • Front page archive • Topic: Listening to Renee Fleming »
ThreadTools
Print
 (Read 2715 times) [1] 2  All
  Listening to Renee Fleming
« on: January 15, 2009, 06:39:10 PM » by Ken Robson
The color gold.
A slender strand
of honeyed sunshine
quivers,

          stretches,

                            holds.
Logged

The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #1 on: January 15, 2009, 06:45:03 PM » by Tom Riordan
Quote from: Ken Robson on January 15, 2009, 06:39:10 PM
The color gold.
A slender strand
of honeyed sunshine
quivers,

          stretches,

                            holds.
Perfect, Ken. Just beautiful. The simple language up top does not steal the show from the second half of the poem, but sets it up just right. Send it to her. Add a rose if you want a date! Tom
Logged
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #2 on: January 15, 2009, 07:08:08 PM » by Dale McLain
Lovely minimal. Skillfully penned.
take care~dale
Logged
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #3 on: January 16, 2009, 12:02:51 AM » by Ken Robson
Thank you Tom and Dale.


                          Ken
Logged

The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #4 on: January 16, 2009, 12:56:48 PM » by Lynn Doiron
Did I not make a comment on this?  I thought I had . . . or maybe I just picked it and meant to comment after the move?  Regardless, loved this one, Ken.

lynn
Logged

My blogs:
http://lwww.lynndoiron.wordpress.com for memoir/journal/poetry
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #5 on: January 16, 2009, 02:16:59 PM » by Ken Robson
Thanks, Lynn.

           Ken
Logged

The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #6 on: January 22, 2009, 01:07:44 AM » by Tom Riordan
Ken, allright!
Logged
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #7 on: January 22, 2009, 01:40:03 AM » by Lavonne Westbrooks
Beautiful. And right where it belongs. Congratulations.
Logged
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #8 on: January 22, 2009, 08:25:10 AM » by maggie flanagan-wilkie
Ken, 

Your spacing choice for those last three words delivers the action of those words to the reader. Had they been all of a line, the effect wouldn't have been the same.

Nicely done.

Maggie





Logged
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #9 on: January 22, 2009, 09:28:22 AM » by Ken Robson
Tom, Lavonne, Maggie,

Thanks. This took me by surprise!

                      Ken
Logged

The craft of angling is catching fish. The art of angling is a
receptiveness to those connections, the art of letting one
thing lead to another until, if only locally and momentarily,
you realize some small completeness.

                                  Ted Leeson
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #10 on: January 22, 2009, 10:14:36 AM » by Lynne Bassler
Just beautiful.   

Lynne
Logged
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #11 on: January 22, 2009, 10:20:24 AM » by brian_edwards
I have to say Ken, I had to google Renee Fleming. And even after I did, I can't get much from your poem other than a poetic description of  . . . something. Not to say poetic descriptions don't have their place of course.

And why the commas by the way? They really dampen the effect of the line breaks, for me.
 
Sorry to be negative, I'm sure there are masses waiting to disagree.

All of that aside, it's always good to see a different face on the front page, and Ken, regardless of my opinion of this particular poem, you definitely deserve the recognition, so good for you. Enjoy!

B.
Logged
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #12 on: January 22, 2009, 12:34:03 PM » by maggie flanagan-wilkie
Quote
a poetic description of  . . . something.


Surely, you gest, b.

Maggie
Logged
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #13 on: January 22, 2009, 01:18:00 PM » by a.e.plastic
Brian, perhaps inevitably, I'm with you on this one. Pretty and pretty slight would be my verdict.
Logged

You don't have to be Japanese to learn how to kowtow
  Re: Listening to Renee Fleming
« Reply #14 on: January 22, 2009, 01:54:36 PM » by maggie flanagan-wilkie
Other than a second look at the way the first two lines of the piece are punctuated, aep, which I'm sure Ken will consider if and when he revises, I don't believe there is anything slight about a poet's observation of the least of things.

Maggie
Logged
 (Read 2715 times) [1] 2  All
Jump to:  
MemberTools
Home
Help
Calendar
Members List
Statistics
Login
Register



LatestNews
Poetry Circle editorial concept.

SiteStats
190902 Posts
18095 Topics
1517 Members
Latest Member: David Gwilym Anthony

Support PoetryCircle







PoetryCircle | Powered by SMF 1.1.15.
© 2005, Simple Machines. All Rights Reserved.
Simplicity design by BlocWeb