[posted to Submit Your Poetry on nov. 24]:
 "DA RAVEN"   by 50 Cento

note on june 13 for next kepler segment:
I don't know what I'm made of but it isn't light. Light hurts me
when it touches me.

submitted to Submit Your Poetry board as: "John Lennon, Upon Learning..."

Here here!!

(nice to see you starting a journal Tom ;) )

B.

Was advised not to use Workshop as workshop so now I'm trying this. I've gotten to like actually working directly on the boards here. Feeling at home. So... ~Tom

What a bizarre piece of advice . . . ???

lol  -   When I was in middle school I memorized "The Raven" (yes, the entire thing) and presented it to my English class.....that was a hoot!  xo M

Glad this feels like home - I do enjoy reading the journals, you're now included!

submitted to Submit Your Poetry as:

Eye-Witness/News-Herald

number 6 - should be on the submit board. It's too good to lounge in your journal. 

Having spent the last ten years acting as an expert witness/custodian of records for a large telephone company, I can attest to the tricky techniques used by attorneys - on both sides.

Love the layout. The skinny column makes the reader feel the experience dragging out; it's also reminiscent of a newspaper column.

Good one.

Your response is very encouraging aka helpful at this point, Lavonne. You make me feel like it CAN go to Submit. But I have to cook it and reread and rewrite a few more cycles, first. Thanks. ~Tom

"Round Raviolis" moved to Submit Your Poetry.

but blanker?

:)

Oh, what fun, you're right there, Lavonne! Problem is, they're not blanker, I don't think.

which is even cooler. :)

Am trying, am trying, but can't do it. The cameos weird me out too much to even joke about a ravioli being blanker! But let's see. Tom

[[/quote]Done only one revision, Lavonne, but I notice I don't want to. It's painful for personal reasons and puts me in a bad place. But I did put it down, did revise once, so we'll see... -Thanks again, Tom